Wednesday, October 22, 2008

"Peter And The Vampires" - Page 43

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3 comments:

Unknown said...

I particularly like the part about the dandelion puff.

October 23, 2008 at 2:43 AM
Stormy Llew said...

I was wondering if all that yelling was going to attract someone's attention. Gotta admit I was hoping it would be Grandfather. While it would be nice if Peter's mom had an encounter with a cluex4, Grandfather would definitely be the more helpful adult to have around at the moment.

I kept reading the part where her grip on his arm was broken as his arm being broken. Nothing wrong with the way it's written, just the screwy way my eyes and brain kept putting it together.

Um, anyway, another good chapter. Sankya for sharing!

October 23, 2008 at 8:53 AM
Anonymous said...

Hey Betwyn Mawr,

Actually, you're right, the way it's written, it messes with the reader. I'm going to rewrite it for the eventual book and probably change it in the post.

Thanks for the input!

And Todd, glad you liked the image!

Darren

October 23, 2008 at 9:59 AM

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