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- by Darren Pillsbury
PETER AND THE VAMPIRES is a horror/comedy web novel (and a free podcast!)about a normal, 10-year-old kid who moves into a sinister town filled with supernatural horribleness. The series is composed of different "monster of the week" stories - kind of like THE X-FILES crossed with THE SIMPSONS (if Mr. Burns were a ghoul and something terrifying lived in the town dump). "Peter And The Dead Men" is the first story in the collection. A new page is posted every day.
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21 comments:
I was hoping hard Charlie would survive this. I guess the only way was for Peter and Dill to interrupt, though. Maybe now Dill will stop with the hero worship.
I had on "Pink Frost" by The Chills as I read this, and it complemented the mood. One question: how did Peter and Dill hear what Charlie whispered?
Todd -
It was a loud whisper.
And the house was quiet enough to hear the fire popping in the next room.
And the acoustics are unbelievably good in the foyer.
I'm glad it wasn't quiet enough to hear Dill's gasp. Although that might've saved Charlie, but I get the impression Charlie was a goner upon conception.
Would Charlie be the first character to go from fully alive to fully dead?
I think Dill's hero worship was dead when Kyle called him a little turd.
Really enjoying the story Darren. :)
Todd -
Dang it, I was being funny, but you've got an excellent point - if the boys can hear Charlie whisper, why can't the frat guys hear Dill gasp? Good one. Im'ma gonna change that.
I think you're right about Charlie being the first to go Fully Alive to Fully Dead. That is, if you don't count the villains...and I don't. And Charlie's not a villain in my eyes. He was a desperately unhappy person who wanted to be somebody else very, very badly; he made some spectacularly bad choices; and he then redeemed himself in the end. Knowing what might happen to him made his final choice all the more courageous in my eyes.
THF -
Thanks! Yeah, I think all of Dill's illusions vanished with being called a turd...
Aww. Poor Charlie. I too was hoping he'd make it out of this alive. :( I hope Grandfather heard that scream and howl though. He may figure out what's going on and rush over to Rambo it up again like with the mannequins, except with silver bullets this time.
CHAAAAAAAAAAAAARLIE!
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YOU'LL SURVIVE! You'll end up in a hospital, (where Peter's mom will Nurse him back to health in one of his better dreams ;D) BUT YOU'LL SURVIVE!
YOU GOTTA! It's like the rules of stories! Good guys always live even if they got a fatal wound THEY STILL ALWAYS LIVE!
N7- Unless they're Boromir. :-p
A hero who does something bad then redeems himself usually bites it (pardon the pun.)
And I kept picturing Charlie as the actor who plays Reed on "Criminal Minds" for some reason.
v-word alsicar
Awesome flow, great build up, and then an even greater cliff hanger. I am angsting for more here!!!!
Luckily next time I get to come on there will probably be LOTS of new posts, which is good and bad at the same time.........
I want to congratulate you on keeping up a daily posting schedule throught out, and keeping the action flowing so well. I truly enjoy this story and am very glad to know that it will keep going to some sort of conclusion whereas so many other stories I have come across have dried up in the middle or post only in fits and starts or lag terribly so that I consciously wait a LONG time before checking on them again. Thank you again for sharing these stories with us all for free, if I find a DT version I will pick it up for my unborn child. =)
v-word: meyinc. definition; unknown
All i can think of is Charlie from Lost. He is as gone as gone can be being entombed in the ocean yet... he comes back!!
Charlie can make his triumphant return as a werewolf and save the boys from certain doom, only to have grandfather burst in at the last minute and BANG!
Poor Charlie...
again...
But N7 what about the Red Shirts, they are good guys but most of them end up dead.
If Dill still has hero worship I think it left when the body went thud on the floor. Dill has seen enough shows to know what happened to Charlie.
The last line mentions a howl like a dog (like a wolf?). Maybe Charlie had some silver on him. Or maybe someone in Kyle's pack is making a bid for alpha wolf, and attacked Kyle. He had only recently tested their loyalty, but it didn't seem like much of a test and they did choose power over decency, after all.
v-word: fallyste.
However much I'd like Charlie to regain consciousness as a good werewolf, I doubt there's much of him left. Kyle didn't leave any dainty cow corpses behind, but instead barely recognizable carnage.
I'd also like Peter and Dill to go undetected upstairs until help arrives, but I'm not too optimistic of that either.
Mary -
Why you have to say that he reminds you of Reed? I <3 Reed! And now I <3 Charlie even more.
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Daymon -
Red shirts can bite me. And I never understood how they never asked why no one else is wearing a red shirt or what ever happened to all the other red shirts. Like really. It seems they weren't that smart.
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I'm just going to continue on with my belief that he'll be fine. They always told me that ignorance is bliss.
Rai -
Hmmm...
N7 Supporter of Charlie and his...
I wish it were true...
Mary -
Case in point...
Anonymous -
Thank you! I'm actually really stoked about everybody liking this story. I was afraid it would move too slowly for most folks, so thanks for the words of encouragement!
And you're welcome on the daily posting schedule. Ha ha, I will definitely publish a version - even if it's self-published - just so you can have it for your unborn child!
AnakMoon -
Naw, he's not as cool as that Charlie.
Wait, I'm thinking Charlie from PARTY OF FIVE, who's also on LOST...
daymon34 -
I think it was already gone when Kyle called him a turd. Dill, as much as I love him, is a little self-centered.
Um the Muse -
I didn't want to use 'wolf.' I know the audience knows, but...who knows, it was a pretty subjective choice, so maybe I'll change it.
Todd -
Yeah, you kind of have to outlive the werewolf attack to turn into one.
And yeah, that's the smart money.
V-word: gortu
Ha ha, I will definitely publish a version - even if it's self-published - just so you can have it for your unborn child!
I really would reconsider calling it Peter and the Frat Boys in widespread release.
N7 & Mary -
Just looked up Reed on CRIMINAL MINDS. Hmm, not exactly what I had in mind, but not too far off, either.
Poor girls...poor Charlie...poor Reed...
Todd -
I might just do that.
err...maybe "Peter and the Dead Cows" or "Peter and the Bloody Bovines" or something like that? "Peter and the Frat Boys" has some weird connotations (assuming you know nothing about the story)--either homoerotic softcore or revamped Animal House. Which is kind of fitting (the animal part, at least), but not the image I think you would be going for...
Stormy Llew -
Hmmm, good point...
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