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- by Darren Pillsbury
PETER AND THE VAMPIRES is a horror/comedy web novel (and a free podcast!)about a normal, 10-year-old kid who moves into a sinister town filled with supernatural horribleness. The series is composed of different "monster of the week" stories - kind of like THE X-FILES crossed with THE SIMPSONS (if Mr. Burns were a ghoul and something terrifying lived in the town dump). "Peter And The Dead Men" is the first story in the collection. A new page is posted every day.
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12 comments:
Mad thanks to Rai for pointing out that the boys would probably go straight to a telephone! I didn't even CONSIDER that possibility...
Peter has just dropped "dozens of necklaces and rings through the air." It's very hard to believe that he scored a direct hit with every item.
The boys are now looking elsewhere for more silver jewelery. It probably would be worth a few words expanding the sentence, "They shone briefly in the moonlight before disappearing into the open jaws of the beast." to indicate the extreme neatness of Peter's silver disposal techniques, or perhaps some indication that Peter had (or hadn't) considered the possibility of silver spillage and had verified the silver-free quality of the ground beneath Jon. A good spot to add a little more tension, even.
Poor Peter, now emphatically aware a silver sandwich was powerful poison and fatal fodder for the wily werewolves, frantically foraged for surplus silver as additional ammunition, his heartfelt hopes despairingly dashed by absent argent. "O cruel fate!" lamented our hero.
Note: Very carefully not your style. :-)
Well here is hoping that they find more silver, of course they are in the best place for that. The ladies that live in that place should have lots of jewelery.
Maybe Peter should try calling Grandpa again, and let him know that there are wolfs about that need stopping.
"O cruel fate!" Lamented our hero.
I love that line for some reason. I really must write a story for the sole purpose of using it now.
Always glad to help with the story sir! I guess the cops wouldn't really take them seriously calling from sorority row. Oh well, they still should have looked into it. Hopefully Grandfather is still coming at least. Perhaps Melissa is getting worried too.
v-word: rudienst, as is in "That telephone operator was the rudienst guy I ever heard!"
As far as picking up the silver jewelry around Jon-I can't see Peter really wanting to get near the corpse unless he has to. Also, Jon is on the ground outdoors and the boys are in the sorority house (on the top floor?). Maybe Dill can find a silver pen, a letter opener, or something else sharp.
The police probably should have sent somebody anyways, though. Even when they think the call is a prank call, I'm pretty sure they have to respond(guessing based on personal experience). I've heard that they just bill the house who calls in the "emergency."
Ooh, how did MistyCat get bold fonts? Inquiring minds want to know :)
I'm afraid Dill might be out of luck. Most weapon or weapon like objects aren't the typical things young girls would own. But who prevents them of turning jewelry into weapons, like trench raiding club (silver jewelry attached to a club) or even the simple improvised "brass" knuckles (wearing large rings)
Peter could try to call his grandfather again, this time he would even know what he is up against.
I could see maybe a letter opener, but it may or may not be silver...If it's anything like my school, weapons are completely prohibited in dorms & greek houses.
As for the talk with the cop--omg that's so like how the cops were in my college town. The divide between students & townies was great and the cops weren't interested in helping us, just busting us.
Um the Muse -
The Comments page says:
... Hang on, I'll have to think (sometimes dangerous.)
Just testing.
To display "<" and ">", I need "<" and ">".
Let's see...
To display "<", I typed "<b>&lt;</b>" but the ampersand looks weird in this font.
And expand... To display "<b>&lt;</b>" I type:
"<b>&amp;lt;</b&gt;"
More testing.
<i> Italic </i> is the same as <em> Emphasis </em>
Italic is the same as Emphasis
<b> This is Bold. </b>
This is Bold
<strong> This is Strong. </strong>
This is Strong
<em> This is Emphasis. </em>
This is Emphasis
More testing.
Your HTML cannot be accepted:
Tag is not allowed: BLOCKQUOTE
Tag is not allowed: STRIKE
Tag is not allowed: FONT
Tag is not allowed: BOLD
<a href="http://www.xkcd.com/264/">Click Me</a>
Click Me
OK, here's my comment again. :-)
The Comments page says:
You can use some HTML tags, such as <b> , <i> , <a>
Darren, do you know if Blogger provides a complete list of allowable tags? I've had a fairly quick look, but my dialup speed is measured in furlongs per fortnight at the moment.
Absent argent, ha ha ha ha.
Word verification: slypirer.
MistyCat -
Good point on the direct hit. I'll probably add something in.
daymon34 -
Good point about Grandpa...I think maybe I should add THAT in, too...
Rai -
The main reason that the cops can't take them seriously is it would seriously screw up my story...
Did I just say that out loud?
Um the Muse -
See above. And thanks again!
Eldoran -
Whaaaaaaaa? Are you SURE a sorority wouldn't have weapon-like objects? Hmmmm...
Stormy Llew -
Yay! Support for my non-helpful- cops plot device!
MistyCat -
You should be able to put just about anything between the following:
Other than that, I'm not sure...
Todd -
Sounds like a Harry Potter word verification...
Then he remembered something, and entered in Grandfather's number.
Would just "Then he entered in Grandfather's number" flow better?
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